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Perched proudly on the pine branch above the frozen shore with waves stopped in time, Fluffed feathers warm the resting eagle from the arctic wind, Suddenly, swiftly Straight down like an arrow the eagle dives daringly into the broken blanket of ice Returning boldly with its captured carp: dinner divine. |
Cloudy day Windy way No sun; the day's begun. Wind and bluster; Coldly flustered The eagle feathers fluff He looks tough and rough.
Perched proudly on the pine branch above the frozen shore; The waves stopped in time, Fluffed feathers warm the resting eagle from the arctic wind.
with its captured carp: dinner divine.
Slitting scales and skin Mangling meat and gently pushing the magnificent meal into the waiting, squawking beaks of its eaglets. |
Early morning; a cloudy day with windy ways and no sun; only grey skies stretching on and on like an endless tunnel in a silent storm stopping the world.
Until "Aaaeee" announces to all: "Awaken. Awaken."
Coldly flustered The eagle feathers fluff He looks tough and rough.
Perched proudly on the pine branch above the frozen shore; The waves stopped in time, Fluffed feathers warm the resting eagle from the arctic wind.
with its captured carp: dinner divine.
Slitting scales and skin Mangling meat and gently pushing the magnificent meal into the waiting, squawking beaks of its eaglets. |
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Early morning; a cloudy day with windy ways and no sun; only grey skies stretching on and on like an endless tunnel in a silent storm stopping the world.
Until "Aaaeee" announces to all: "Awaken. Awaken."
Coldly flustered, The eagle fluffs feathers Hovering closer, deeper into its nest of two huddled eaglets.
Perched proudly on the knotty nest straddling the pine branches above the frozen shore-- The waves stopped in time; "Aaareee," theresting eagle scolds the arctic wind whisking the branches back and forth, a cradle rocking.
"Aaareee," again and the wind washes softer over the ice into the pine around the coat of feathers.
into the broken blanket of ice, with its captured carp.
"AAAAeerrrreeeee," the eagle warns the wind again;
"Aa-ee,"reminds the eagle: "awake and eat." A squirrel peels a pinecone. A sparrow flits onto a prairie rose branch.
The eagle's beak slits the scales and skin, Mangling the meat to push the magnificent meal into the waiting, squawking beaks of its eaglets.
"Ah-eee."
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